bartolay cueva chap 5&6(see comments)

CHAPTER V
Presentation, Interpretation and Analysis of Data
Respondents’ Profile
Before the researchers conducted the survey, the respondents were asked first if they had seen the whole episode of the Boys Over Flowers movie.
After the survey was conducted, researchers gathered the data and organized it into tables, pies and bar graphs. Accordingly, this whole chapter studies and analyzes the gathered data. Findings from this chapter will serve as basis for the conclusion of this research.
The growing population of teenagers is dominating the population at large nowadays. These teenagers with an age bracket from 13-18, are consequently affected by their surroundings and environment. They are also easily influenced by media and is (grammar) the target of this researchers. Now, the researchers measures (subject verb issue) whether the concerned female teenagers are affected by the Boys Over Flowers movies in their preferences towards their ideal guys.
Moreover, the chosen respondents were 20 first year female students of the University of the Philippines-Cebu.
Researchers assumed that teenagers especially within the age bracket of 16 to 18 are in the stage of puberty and are prone to social influences. Moreover, they are exposed to media, most specifically to the television. They had been (remove been) watched the full episode of Boys Over Flowers.
Thus, the following evaluation tables, pies and bar graphs (assess the respondents’ preference for their ideal guy) are served as an assessment of the respondents’ preference for their ideal guy.
A. Physical Attribute (intro to this)
A.1

The pie graph in A1 entails the respondents’ frequency of likeness to the hair of a guy. It shows that 16 respondents like guys who have straight hair while only 4 (four) respondents like guys who have curly hair.
The result indicates that 80% of the respondents like their ideal guy to have straight hair. Moreover, only 20% of the respondents like curly-haired guys. Thus, this indication implies (redundant. Either indicates or implies) that they like straight haired guys because it is look more attractive in their straight hair picture because of the way the light hits their face and the angle, making their face appear slimmer. (fused error.rephrase)
The next figure presents the data concerning the likeness of the females to their ideal guys’ nose. (intro to nose)
notes:
1. please fix/evaluate the errors above and apply the same comments to the rest of the chapter. These errors are also found on the other parts:
a. there is always an introduction or description for each attribute before presenting a table.
b. analyze and interpret the result well. give a detailed explanation.avoid shortcut.
c. implies or indicates means the same thing.do not use both.
d. subject should agree with its verb.

another point:
there is no matching of the results on physical traits, attitudes or lifetyles between their ideal guy and those of boys over flowers. do they match? the last part which asks the respondents whether they were affected or not is not valid and reliable.You compare their answers in ideal guy preferences and qualities they like from boys over flowers characters and see if these qualities match.dont rush the submission.make sure that your paper is well written, and results well analyzed. this also applies to your chap 6. evaluate again.