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McLuhan (as cited in Kappelman, 2002) stated that people are so fond of technology’s existence as an extension to humans’ limitations that they forget to think of its counterpart, which is what he called as amputations. Amputation is the effect of over using an extension, it is (comma splice) the ability of an extension to change or modify another extension. (source) Cars as mentioned are extensions to individuals’ feet are amputations, for it causes obesity, pollution and reduce time of socialization.(source) McLuhan concluded further that technology drastically altered how humans’ use their senses.(elaborate)
McLuhan’s Technological Determinism states that Technology affects human society.(how?) It is further explained (faulty referencing) that exposure to such changes the behaviour of individuals (awkward). Technological Determinism’s main point is that human behaviour is affected by the different kinds of an individual is exposed to (no thought). This is due to our increasing rate of dependency towards technology and when humans became dependent to technology, reliance to it in doing daily activities becomes a habit. Our habits are what constitute our attitude and personality. Thus, if there is a change in habitual activities, then there is also change in personality and attitude.
Figure 1 (on the next page) shows how Technology affects human society. Based on Technological Determinism, human society is affected by the changes acquired of an individual from using different products of Technology. (faulty construction)
(there are many grammatical errors.check first every sentence before I proceed reading through the whole chapter.)