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alcuizar and macopial chap 6 (comments in parentheses in between sentences)

CHAPTER VI
SUMMARY OF FINDINGS, CONCLUSIONS AND RECOMMENDATIONS

SUMMARY OF FINDINGS
The main objective of conducting the study was to define man’s nature through the characters Ralph, Jack, Piggy and Simon, in William Golding’s novel, Lord of the Flies, focusing on the psychological context of the novel. In order to define the nature of man, situations were taken from the novel and were used for the analysis of the characters. The different behaviors of the characters in each of the gathered situations (basic needs) were used in the psychoanalysis of the nature of man.
The summary of the finding are as follows:
1. The nature of man, in perspective of psychology, can be seen in two personas because of the different beliefs of different psychologists like Freud, Allport and Rousseau. However, in the novel, man is seen as innately evil which supports the Theory of Personality of Sigmund Freud. The author of the novel did not disregard the concept that man is naturally good however, (punctuation) it was implied that people with this quality is seldom seen in the society (period)
2. Using psychological perspectives, specifically Freud’s mental construct, the main characters in the novel represents the id, ego and superego. Ralph represents the ego while Jack characterizes the hedonistic desires of person which is the id. Piggy represents the superego, which tells a person from right and wrong in terms of the societal norms of a person. On the other hand Simon represents the concept of man being in nature good.
3. The decisions and actions of the characters in the novel Lord of the Flies are affected by two factors: the environmental and the social factors. Environmental factors include the characters’ need for nutritious food, fresh water, clean clothes and durable shelter that could protect them from any harm. The social factors include the characters’ need to fit into a group and be accepted, the need to be respected and recognized, and the need to fulfill the roles they think fit for them. These environmental and social factors are based on A.H. Maslow’s Theory of Motivation.
4. The characters’ decisions and actions define the true nature of man by how these decisions are affected by the dominant mental aspect of man (id, ego, and superego). These actions and decisions are observed using Freudian’s Theory of Personality. If the characters’ nature is id-dominated, that is, if he achieves his needs in whatever ways he can notwithstanding its effects on others, his nature is bad. If the characters’ nature is ego and super-ego dominated, that is, he obeys the rules and regulations constructed by the society, his nature is good.



CONCLUSION
Man, as depicted in the novel Lord of the Flies by William Golding, is innately evil. That without society and rules, man goes back to his primordial self, prioritizing only what he desires and not caring for the effects his action may cause to other people. Though the nature of man, in the perspective of psychology, can be described as good and bad, the novel asserted that man is indeed wicked. This wickedness was clearly manifested by the character of Jack in the novel.
The characters in the novel depicted different dominant mental construct (id, ego and superego) that affects their decisions and actions. Jack represents the id dominant people who seek satisfaction of their hedonistic desires through methods that might harm other people. In contrast with that, Piggy characterizes the superego dominant people who want every decision and action to be morally correct. On the other hand, Ralph symbolizes the ego dominant people who try to balance the desires of their id and the constraints of their superego. Simon, at one hand, represents the naturally good people.
The dominant aspect of nature (id, ego or superego) of the characters in the novel affects their decisions and actions. If the character is predominantly id in nature, decisions and actions of the character would be all about satisfying one’s desire without thinking of the consequences of his actions. Ego dominated characters takes in consideration of the effects it might cause to others while those characters dominated by superego will always act according to what is morally right for them.
Using the Theory of Personality by Sigmund Freud as a support, the researchers found out that without societal norms, man has the greater tendency to return back to his original nature. The author of the novel, however, did not neglect the concept that man is naturally good. In the novel, it was implied that people with this quality is seldom seen in the society.(this line is from the first page, first finding.do not copy.reword or rephrase)


RECOMMENDATION

The true nature of man has always been the subject of critical debate. This topic is so broad, so to speak, and no man has yet presented the accurate answer to the main question. As of now, all we’ve got are the theories made by some brilliant psychologists and the results of the previous researches conducted by the curious people.
We, the researchers, wanted to know the true nature of man behind the social norms. We are trying (tense) to study the nature of man by making a character analysis of the characters in the novelLord of the Flies by William Golding.
We recommend the use of more possible psychological theories that will help in defining the nature of man in a much more detailed research. Furthermore, we recommend the future researches of this topic to look for additional research papers and other related studies that will help not only the readers of the research but also the researchers themselves. Articles of the view of the author and papers relating to the book are highly recommended.
Lastly, we recommend the in depth reading of the book many times in order to understand more the allegories and symbolisms used by the author in the novel.

alcuizar and gamboa chap 5 (comments in parentheses in between sentences)

CHAPTER V
PRESENTATION, INTERPRETATION AND ANALYSIS OF DATA
In this chapter the interpretation and analysis of the true nature of man is thoroughly discussed through the presentation of the gathered data (situations, decisions, etc.) from the novel Lord of the Flies.

SUBJECT’S PROFILE
The subjects of this research are the characters in the novel who are young British boys with ages ranging from six to twelve years old. Due to a plane crash, these boys were trapped in an isolated island. In the island, there was no adult supervision that would guide in their conquest for survival and would also help in their aim to be rescued in the island. The novel didn’t really give the exact number of boys in the novel but it tells the readers that there were only a few big older boys than the young ones. This research focuses mainly on the characters of Ralph, Jack, Piggy and Simon because of their great importance in the flow of the story. These characters are very important because of their influence to the other characters in the novel through their decisions and actions.
The next section of this chapter presents the data gathered from the novel and the interpretation and analysis of data defining the true nature of man. The researchers used the decisions and actions of the characters in examining the different behaviors of the characters in each of the gathered situations. The data that was gathered was used in the psychoanalysis of the nature of man.

ANALYSIS:
Nature of Man
In psychological perspective, man is seen in two different personas by psychologists. Some psychologists like Allport (as cited in Coleman, 1960) and Rousseau (as cited in Fromm and Xirau, 1968) see man as naturally good. They believe that humans are gentle creatures who love to exist in a world where everybody can live harmoniously, to exist in a world of peace and order (Coleman, 1960).
In contrast to that, many believed that man is innately evil. Sigmund Freud, a psychologist that believe (faulty) man is innately evil, theorized a mental construct that states that one’s mind is divided into three aspects or psychological processes that works as one—id, ego and superego. Id refers to the part of the human mind where the other two aspects (ego and superego) originated (Rychlack, 1981). This implies that id is the part of a person’s mind that is innate from the time of birth while the other two branched out from the id as the person grows up. This id constitutes the egoistic desires of a person and therefore the pleasure seeking part of the mind (Hall, 1970). Its main function is to strive for satisfaction from what the person desires, not caring about the means of getting it whether it is evil or good.
The other psychological process of the human mind is the ego. The ego distinguishes what is real and what is imagination (Hall, 1970). It serves as the connection between the unconscious mind, where the id is located, and the conscious mind where motor actions are initiated (Rychlack, 1981). This means that the ego is the one that makes what the id wants to do in order to fulfill the pleasures the id wants.
However, even though the ego acts as the bridge to do things that the id wants, it does not always do what the id desires because of the interference of the third aspect which is the superego. Like the ego, superego is the aspect that branched out from the id. If the ego came to be because of the need to self-actualize to satisfy a person’s desire, the superego on the other hand, developed do to the societal influence of the environment the person lives in.
Superego represents the values and behaviors that are considered by the society as ideally correct (Hall, 1970). It infers that the superego differs in each person depending on how the people surrounding him/her behave and what they consider as right or wrong. It also indicates that superego actually inhibits the thoughts of the id if it is against his/her principles. Since the ego is the only connection in the mind that controls what to do and how to do it, superego tries to convince the ego to act according to what is morally correct for him/her rather than to what is more practical (realistic) (Hall, 1970).
The Theory of Personality of Sigmund Freud implies that the nature of man will depend on the habitat of a person and on how strong the societal principles from the person’s environment is etched in to the person’s own principles. Though the three aspects of the mental construct of the human mind acts as one, the decisions and actions of man differs depending on which aspect influences the most. This research aims to define the nature of man shown in the novel, depending on how many characters were able or not able to let their moral principles determine their decisions and actions.
Psychological Representations of the Characters
Jack
Jack represents the id in Freudian psychology wherein the satisfaction of his hedonistic desires is the very core of his decisions and actions. The first time Jack was mentioned in the story was after Ralph had blown the conch. He was described by the author as a “tall, thin, and bony; and his hair was red beneath the black cap. His (Jack) face was crumpled and freckled, and ugly without silliness” (p. 20).
The first reason why Jack represents the id is that he desires for power and total control. Jack is the leader of the group of choir and was a complete dictator to the group. When they were having an election for their chief he said with arrogance, “I ought to be chief because I’m chapter chorister and head boy” (p. 22). His statement implies that he does not care of the opinion of others as long as he gets what he wants. Another scene that depicts him as a dictator was when they were approaching the island. The group of boys had to line up marching to their destination and they need for Jack’s permission to sit down or even taking off their hats (found on page 20).
Jack also has this obsession to be the leader. Though he wanted to be chief, he was not elected because the boys wanted Ralph to be their leader. Upon knowing he is not chief, “the freckles on Jack’s face disappeared under a blush of mortification” (p. 23) But when Ralph assigned him to be the head of the hunters, “He started up, then changed his mind and sat down again while the air rang” (p. 23).This entails how being an influential person or to self-actualize as an important person is very essential for him. He always tries to prove that he is better than Ralph and that he should be the chief. Here is the best illustration for that:
He (Ralph) isn’t a proper chief. […] He’s not a hunter. He’d never have got us meat. He isn’t a prefect and we don’t know anything about him. He just gives orders and expects people to obey for nothing. […]He held the conch against his chest with one hand and stabbed the air with his index finger. Who thinks Ralph oughtn’t to be chief? pp. 126-127
After Jack’s speech he was not still elected as chief making him so enraged and humiliated that he announced out that he will quit being part of their lot.
In addition to the reason that Jack represents the id is that, just like the id, Jack also lusts for violence and blood. On the first part of the novel, before he separated from the lot (group), he was the head of the hunters. Though he led the hunters in hunting for meat, he and the hunters were afraid of killing and seeing blood. As the author phrases it, they can’t do it “because of the enormity of the knife descending and cutting into living flesh; because of the unbearable blood” (p. 31). However as the sense of id grow much stronger in Jack, the fear of killing has become an addiction to the extent that violence committed did not entail any guilt and remorse but instead he and the boys were enjoying and laughing reenacting what they did (Golding, 1954).
The combination of lust for power and violence led to the situation where two boys died because of Jack leadership to the group. The leadership of fear and violence used by Jack became the catalyst for the other young boys to become savages like Jack. The death of Piggy did not falter Jack’s conviction of becoming chief, so much that when they killed Piggy, his initial reaction was, “See? See? That’s what you’ll get! I meant that! There isn’t a tribe for you anymore! The conch is gone— […] I’m chief!” (p. 190). Because Jack’s mind is predominantly ruled by the id, he does not care if his decisions and actions may hurt or worse kill anyone.
Piggy
Piggy symbolizes the superego in the mental construct of Freud’s Theory of Personality. The superego is the part of the mind that contains the societal norms of an individual. It acts as a conscience of an individual because upon the upbringing of the child, the child is already taught what is right and wrong. What is learned by the child becomes his/her basis or guide in determining if his/her actions are good or bad. Relating to the character Piggy, he has this mannerism to relate what he does and recall things that was taught to him by his auntie like “My auntie told me not to run […] on account of my asthma” (p.9) and on other instances such as those on pages 13, 16 and 141 of the novel.

Piggy also represents the superego in a way that he always advice Ralph and the others to do what is right in terms of the norms of the society in the real world. As shown in this line, “We know what goes on and if there’s something wrong, there’s someone to put it right” (p. 83), Piggy believes that someone should correct the mistakes of others. For example, he was defending Ralph and scolding the others by saying, “You said Ralph was chief and you don't give him time to think. Then when he says something you rush off” (Golding, 1954, p. 46).

Another instance was on the task of maintaining the fire as shown in this line:
But nobody else understands about the fire. […] Can’t they see? Can’t they understand? Without the smoke signal we’ll die here? Look at that! A wave of heated air trembled above the ashes but without a trace of smoke. We can’t keep one fire going. And they don’t care. […] What ’ud become of us? Piggy took off his glasses, deeply troubled. I dunno, Ralph. We just got to go on, that’s all. That’s what grown-ups would do. p. 139

This conversation of Piggy and Ralph implies how Piggy really cares about being rescued. He has this attitude like the superego that aims to inhibit egoistic desires of others that do not help them in becoming morally correct.

Ralph
Ralph is described in the book as a “fair boy” and that “[…] he might make a boxer…but there was a mildness about his mouth and eyes that proclaimed no devil” (Golding, 1954, p.10). Opposite to Jack, Ralph’s physical qualities are one of the reasons that make him a natural leader. Ralph is considered as natural leader because according to the research of McCroskey and McCain (1974), good looking individuals are able to attract more people making them more influential. People with good appearance are viewed more positively than the others (Collins, Dutta & Zerbrowitz, 1998). This is further supported by the research of Monnig (2005) that states that to be a leader is to be someone who attracts others and is able to persuade everyone to follow him.
Using Freud’s mental construct, Ralph represents the ego. Ego represents the process wherein what is practical or what is appropriate of the situation is being acted. It is where judgment of the decisions and actions takes place. If we relate ego to Ralph, he as the leader of the society they formed, it can be seen how he tries to do what he thinks is right and that is reflected in his decisions and actions. For example, Golding states:
There’s another thing. We can help them to find us. If a ship comes near the island they may not notice us. So we must make smoke on top of the mountain. We must make a fire. (Golding, p.38) (only the page no.)

Ralph’s decision in making a fire is one of the proofs that he is not thinking mildly of their situation in the island. Unlike the other kids who just wanted to enjoy the freedom they are experiencing because of the absence of adults, Ralph was thinking of the enormity and risk of staying much longer in the island without supply of food and proper shelters. He proposed a way for them to be saved, for them to go back to the real world. He was not only concerned of being rescued but also on how they would survive in the island while waiting to be rescued.
He proposed to have hunters for them to have meat to eat and also made into action the suggestions of Piggy like building shelters. While the others were playing, he and Simon were building the shelters.
Ralph as the representation of the ego is sometimes tempted with what Jack and the others do. An example of these was when they were reenacting the kill of the pig where “Ralph too was fighting to get near, to get a handful of that brown, vulnerable flesh. The desire to squeeze and hurt was over-mastering.”(Golding, 1954, p.172) However, because Piggy is always beside Ralph, Ralph is always reminded to do what is right.

Simon
Simon represents the concept that man is innately good. Though there are many psychologists who believe that man is innately evil like Freud, there are also others that believe man is naturally good. Simon represents this psychological thought. Simon embodies a person who is naturally good.
Simon was always helpful to others. He helped in the building of the shelters together with Ralph. One proof of this was when Ralph was scolding Jack, he said, “And I work all day with nothing but Simon and you come back and don’t even notice the huts! […] Simon. He helps. He pointed at the shelters.” (p. 54). Similarly, he was also kind to the younger boys like for instance, “Simon found for them (littluns) the fruit they could not reach” (p. 56).
Other than being helpful Simon is also kind to everyone. When Piggy was being bullied by Jack, he defended Piggy by saying, “We used his specs…He helped that way” (p. 42). Another incident of Jack bullying Piggy was when Jack didn’t give Piggy meat to eat because Jack was angry at Piggy. Simon then “sitting between the twins and Piggy, wiped his mouth and shoved his piece of meat over the rocks to Piggy, who grabbed it“(p. 74). Another instance was when no one wanted to return to where Piggy and the others are and tell (check) them that Ralph and the others will be back after dark. Simon volunteered to go back alone even though it was very dark and there was this question of security because of the so-called beast. The following lines show this:
Simon was crying out something about a dead man on a hill. “Kill the beast! Cut his throat! Spill his blood! Do him in!” (Boys) The sticks fell and the mouth of the new circle crunched and screamed. The beast was on its knees in the center, its arms folded over its face. It was crying out against the abominable noise something about a body on the hill. The beast struggled forward, broke the ring and fell over the steep edge of the rock to the sand by the water. At once the crowd surged after it, poured down the rock, leapt on to the beast, screamed, struck, bit, tore. There were no words, and no movements but the tearing of teeth and claws. (p. 152) (remove parenthesis)
This scene implies how Simon became the first victim of the savagery of the boys in the novel. His kindness to everyone did not help saved him from the brutality of the other boys that led him to his death. He had proven all along his statement of who the beast really is, “What I mean is. . . maybe it’s only us” (p. 89).

Factors Affecting the Decisions and Actions of Man
The situations in the novel Lord of the Flies by William Golding are jam-packed with a lot of factors that greatly affect the decisions and actions of the characters in the novel. These factors affect in such a way that they can define the true nature of man, taking into consideration how he/she reacted to a certain factor. In order to easily determine the differences of these factors, the researchers categorized the said factors into two groups: the environmental factors and the social factors.

Environmental factors
The instances that fall under the environmental factors are the first two items found in the pyramid of Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs. These factors are the characters’ physiological needs --- the need for fine food, clean water, and gratifying pastime ---and their safety and security needs --- the need for durable shelter, reliable protection, and immediate rescue.

Physiological needs
According to A.H. Maslow (as cited in Green, 2000), the first factor that affects the “integrated wholeness” of a person is the physiological need, or the need for good food, fresh water, and enjoyable pastime. Consequently, the main factor that affects the decisions and actions of the characters in the novel is the characters’ need for food, water, and rest.

The Need for Sufficient and Healthy Food
The characters in the novel primarily need food, specifically fruits from trees and meat from the animals in the island. When the boys arrived in the island, they decided to first build a fire in order to give a signal that human life is present in that place. But as they rejoiced for the freedom they have had, their supply of food is also threatened. “Then when you get here you build a bonfire that isn’t no use. Now you been and set the whole island on fire. Won’t we look funny if the whole island burns up? Cooked fruit, that’s what we’ll have to eat, and roast pork.” (p. 45). “When the meeting was over… they (the other boys) wander off (into the forest to get fruits) or go hunting (p. 51). The previous statements stated by Piggy and Ralph (respectively) prove that the boys’ primary need is food. They desperately need ample amount of healthy foods in order to survive. However, the supply of nutritious and adequate foods in the island is scarce due to the existence of wildlife animals such as birds, bees, and butterflies. In order to get food and satisfy their hunger, the boys are left with these choices: to contentedly pick fresh fruits hanging from its branches and attain an unsatisfying meal, or to bravely hunt for the wandering boars in the forest and achieve a satiating one.
Picking fruits is not an easy task for the boys, since heaps of bees are also sating their hunger in the sweetness offered by the fruits. As Golding had described, “Everywhere was the scent of ripeness and the booming of a million bees at pasture.” (p. 56).Subsequently, the birds and the bees which predominantly satisfy their hunger on various kinds of fruits threatened the boys’ food supply. Nevertheless, the boys still eat the food in order to survive.
Jack, the leader of the choir boys who were also trapped in the island, believed that fruits can’t placate their hunger. To hide his dissatisfaction for not voted as the chief, he offered to be the leader of the hunters. Ralph, as the “chief” or the leader of the group, agreed that they needed hunters. “So you see… we need hunters to get us meat.” (p. 33). Thus the existence of the island hunters began.

The Need for Clean and Fresh Water
The second environmental factor, which still belongs to the physiological needs, is the necessity of having fresh, uncontaminated water to quench the boys’ thirst. At first, everything that concerns water is not a problem. However, as the days passed, the issue of unclean place emerged. Ralph, because of his frustration, called an assembly and raised his concern:
We decide things. But they don’t get done. We were going to have water brought from the stream and left in those coconut shells under fresh leaves. So it was, for a few days. Now there’s no water. The shells are dry. People drink from the river. […]There’s another thing. We chose the rocks right along beyond the bathing pool as lavatory… That was sensible too. The tide cleans the place up… Now, people seem to use anywhere. Even near the shelter and the platform… We’ve all got to use the rocks again. This place is getting dirty. p. 79-80
In this part of the novel, it is emphasized that if the boys don’t follow the rules concerning the cleanliness of their place, the probability of having a filthy environment is bigger. If they don’t dispose their waste properly, especially that the “littluns” or the little kids “were now used to stomachaches and a sort of chronic diarrhea” (p. 59), the tendency of drinking contaminated and unsafe water increases. Hence, the supply of safe drinking water is endangered.
Here’s another situation which proves that the boys’ in the novel need clean and safe water:
He (Ralph) led the way over the rocks, inspected a sort of half cave that held nothing more terrible than a clutch of rotten eggs… There was indeed a long green smudge halfway up the rock. They climbed up and tasted the trickle of water.
Jack: “You could keep a coconut shell there, filling all the time.”
Ralph: “Not me. This is a rotten place.” p. 106
In this situation, Ralph refused Jack’s suggestion of getting water over the rocks because of the fact that the source of water is very grimy.

The Need to Play and Rest
The last physiological need that affects the decisions and actions of the characters in the novel is the necessity of having enough rest and good pastime. Having enough rest includes having adequate amount of sleeping hours; on the other hand, having a good pastime includes indulging oneself in a pleasurable game.
The character’s necessity of having a sound sleep is also illustrated in the book. Like the twins Sam and Eric (often referred to as Samneric) who fell asleep during their duty of watching/guarding the fire in this incident:
In the darkness of early morning… two boys rolled out a pile of brushwood and dead leaves… talking sleepily to each other. They were the twins, on duty at the fire. In theory one should have been asleep and one on watch. But… since staying awake all night is impossible, they had both gone to sleep. p. 96
This situation proves that even though the characters in the novel need to keep the smoke going, their need to have rest greatly affect their need to watch the fire.
The characters in the novel also need time to play. Despite their need to hunt for meat and build shelters, they also need time for playing. The situations below highlight the boys’ need to have fun:
“Aside from food and sleep, they found time for play, aimless and trivial, in the white sand by the bright water.” (p. 59)
The hunters, even though they’re tired “have been swimming” (p. 51). “From beyond the platform came the shouting of the hunters in the swimming pool.” (p. 54)
The littluns, despite their fears, “had built castles in the sand…” (p. 59)

Safety and Security Needs
In Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs (as cited in Green, 2000), the need succeeding the physiological needs is the necessity to feel safe and secure. Coincidentally, the second environmental factor that affects the decisions and actions of the characters in Golding’s Lord of the Flies is the need to be free from danger and threats. This includes the characters’ need to have a shelter that could assure their safety, the characters’ necessity to have a dependable protection that could make them feel secure, and their need for an immediate rescue that could save them from supplementary destruction.

The Need for Durable Shelter
Aside from having food and water to survive, there was also the need to protect their bodies from the harshness of the weather in the island. Piggy emphasized the desperate need of humans to have a shelter good enough to free them from any harm, when he blurted out, “Just you listen! The first thing we ought to have made was shelters down there by the beach” (p. 45).
In the early days of their stay in the island, the boys need shelters only for the sole purpose of keeping them from the extreme heat and excessive rain. However, as their number of days (on staying in the island) increases, the boys need shelter not only to guard them from the harshness of the rain and sun, but also to keep them away from any harm brought by the “beast”. As what Ralph had said, “If it rains like when we dropped in we’ll need shelters all right. And then another thing. We need shelter because of the ---“(p. 52).
The Need for Unswerving Protection
At first, the boys were overjoyed by the mere thought of having the total freedom they dreamed of that they hadn’t wished for any adult existence. This is presented in Ralph’s reaction upon realizing that there are no adults in the island. “… The delight of a realized ambition overcame him. In the middle of the scar he stood… and shouted “No grown-ups!” (p. 8)
The thought of having no adult to fall a heavy hand is overwhelming for the boys. However, they need someone who can act as an adult to put things in order. To use the words of Piggy, “We know what goes on, and if there’s something wrong, there’s someone to put it right” (p. 83-84). Hence, the boys elected a leader. The leader is the one who is expected to build the rules and regulations of the place. The leader acts as the man who resolves what is right and wrong for the safety and protection of his/her members. This is attested by Ralph, “Seems to me we ought to have a chief to decide things” (p. 22).
Ralph said, “If you were to be a chief, you were to be wise.” (p. 78) If this belief be followed, there’s a higher probability that Piggy can be the leader. “What intelligence had been shown was traceable to Piggy, while the most obvious leader was Jack. But there was a stillness about Ralph as he sat that marked him out: there was his size, and attractive appearance” (p. 22). According to Collins, Dutta, & Zebrowitz ( 1998) , physical appearance plays very important role in human’s social environment. Even though Piggy has the intellect to lead the boys, Ralph has the outward appearance that influences others to follow him.
However, as days passed by, the boys’ feeling of gaiety for the acquired freedom started to fade. As days passed, they longed for steadfast protection. This started on the day of the second assembly --- the day “when a little boy (with a mulberry-colored birthmark on one side of his cheek) timidly asks the bigger boys on what they will do about the snake-thing.” (p. 35) Instead of answering the question, “Ralph laughed, and the other boys laughed with him.” (p. 35) In order to lighten the issue, Ralph said, “He is dreaming. “, and then “looked for confirmation round the ring of faces. The older boys agreed; but here and there among the little ones was the doubt that required more than rational assurance” (p. 36). Though the other boys’ initial reaction upon hearing the child’s question is to laugh, that day marks the birth of their fears. This assertion is proven by this statement: “There was no laughter at all now and more grave watching” (p. 36).
The situation gets worse when the child with the mark in his face disappeared without a trace. Since then, the boys’ fears grew bigger each day. The little kids, better known as the littluns, “suffered untold terrors in the dark and huddled together for comfort.” (p. 59) In order to seek for security, Phil, a littlun, recounted his dream to the other boys.
Last night, I had a dream, a horrid dream, fighting with the things… Then I was frightened and I woke up. And I was outside the shelter by myself in the dark and the twisty things had gone away. I was frightened and started to call Ralph and then I saw something moving among the trees… I was asleep when the twisty things were fighting and when they went away I was awake, and I saw something big and horrid moving in the trees.
p.84–85

As Phil narrated his story, the other boys had discovered their own uncertainties too. Golding described the boys’ reaction to Phil’s story as this: “the vivid horror of this, so possible and so nakedly terrifying, held them all silent” (p. 85).
The situations above illustrate how the little boys urgently need security as they stayed longer in the island. All of them need the assurance that the there’s someone who will protect them. Borrowing the words of Ralph, “If only they could send us something grown-up…” (p.94).
The Need for Immediate Rescue
The boys in the novel also need abrupt rescue. Hence, they formed an assembly and decided on the things they need to do first. Then Ralph, the chief, suggested on building a fire. “We can help them to find us. If a ship comes near the island they may not notice us. So we must make smoke on the top of the mountain. We must make a fire! (p. 38)
“The best thing we can do is get ourselves rescued” (p.53). This statement demonstrates that Ralph believes that they should build a fire for a greater propensity to be rescued. However, some of the boys, particularly Jack, the leader of the hunters, don’t like the idea of building a fire. Jack has the inclination of hunting for meat than being rescued. The following situation proves that Jack prefers to hunt than to build a fire:
Ralph: “The best thing we can do is get ourselves rescued.”
Jack had to think for a moment before he could remember what rescue was.
Jack: “Rescue? Yes, of course! All the same, I’d like to catch a pig first ---“
(p.53)
As Jack and Ralph’s conversation prolonged, the latter becomes impatient because of the previous’ cavalier treatment of being rescued. “I was talking about smoke! Don’t you want to be rescued? All you can talk about is pig, pig, pig” (p.54)! This situation portrays Ralph’s desperate attempt to be rescued in order to evade further harm.

Social Factors
Social factors include the three basic needs found after the first two needs of Maslow’s Theory of Motivation. These are the need to belong and to be accepted, the need to be respected and to be recognized, and the need to be self-actualized. Social factors have got something to do with the society a person lives in and how he/she is treated in that society. Consequently, the social factors in the novel Lord of the Flies deal with the boys’ relationship to the other. In this part, the researchers will discuss how these social factors affect the decisions and actions of the characters in the novel.

The Need to Belong and to be Accepted
The third part of Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs is the need to fit into a group and be accepted (as cited in Green, 2000). In the novel, the boys yearned to belong and be accepted by their fellows. However, this yearning is not easy to obtain. As what Nash (1985) states, to belong to a group is not easy because people (from the social framework) look for a “stigma” --- an aspect of a human being that can be considered undesirable by other people, thus making such person a "social deviant" of the community . In the novel, the need to belong is dominant in the characters of Simon and Piggy.
Simon really wanted to belong in the group. This is evident in the situation found in page 143, wherein the Lord of the Flies (which is actually his inner self) talks to Simon: “You don’t want Ralph to think you’re batty, do you? You like Ralph a lot, don’t you? And Piggy, and Jack?” However, despite his need for belongingness, Simon is often ignored and laughed at because Ralph and Jack (the symbol of the people from the social framework), thought that “he’s queer” (p.55). This belief that he’s odd becomes worse when he said to the boys that maybe, the beast exists. “Maybe… there is a beast … What I mean is… maybe it’s only us.” (p. 89) His need to be accepted plummeted when, after articulating his belief, the boys laughed. Golding described Simon’s feeling this way: “Simon’s effort fell about him in ruins; the laughter beat him cruelly and he shrank away defenseless to his seat” (p.89). The feeling of being powerless experienced by Simon is a natural reaction for not achieving acceptance. As what Goldstein (2006) had written, to be socially alienated is like living in a desert wherein neither no one can help you nor no one wants to aid you.
Eventually, Simon achieved the feeling of acceptance as the story goes on. “Diffidently, Simon allowed his pace to slacken until he was walking side by side with Ralph… Ralph glanced sideways, smiled as though he had forgotten that Simon had made a fool of himself… For a moment or two, Simon was happy to be accepted” (p. 103- 104).
Another boy who aches for acceptance and belongingness is Piggy. He yearns for the group’s acceptance so that he can freely raise his concerns and give suggestions to the group. However, his propositions are always neglected. Whenever he talks, Ralph or Jack would shut him up. His predicament is emphasized through these lines: “You said you wanted a small fire and you been and built a pile like a hayrick. If I say anything, you say shut up; but if Jack or Maurice or Simon – “ (p. 43).
Aside from being the outcast, Piggy is also the laughingstock of the group. When the boys knew that his name is Piggy, “a storm of laughter arose and even the tiniest child joined in… he went very pink, [and he just] bowed his head…” (p. 21) The main reason why he’s often the subject of indifference is his physical appearance. He is very fat and he wears thick spectacles. In their research, Collins, Dutta, & Zebrowitz (1998) wrote that physical appearance plays an enormous role in human’s social environment. Good-looking individuals are viewed “more positively” compared to the less-attractive ones. The former were recognized as “more sociable, socially skilled, more popular, more competent, and more dominant than the latter (Collins, Dutta, &Zebrowitz, 1998).
As time goes by, the group, led by Ralph, had learned to accept Piggy. The situations below portrayed how Piggy reacted to the fact that Ralph has already accepted him:
Ralph turned and smiled involuntarily. Piggy was a bore; his fat, his ass-mar, and his matter-of-fact ideas were dull, but there was always a little pleasure to be got out of pulling his leg... Piggy saw the smile and misinterpreted it as friendliness. There had grown up tacitly among the biguns the opinion that Piggy was an outsider... Now, finding that something he had said made Ralph smile, he rejoiced…” (p. 65) “When he understood how far Ralph had gone toward accepting him, he flushed pinkly with pride. p. 140

These situations also portray how belonging and being accepted to the group gives satisfaction to Piggy.

The Need for Self- confidence, Strength, and Respect
The boys in the novel Lord of the Flies need to have self-esteem --- self-confidence, strength, and respect --- in order to survive.
One example is when the little boy with a mulberry-colored birthmark on one side of his cheek tried to speak up, “The small boy held out his hands for the conch and the assembly shouted for laughter… he snatched back his hands and started to cry” (p.35). This scene clearly depicts how the absence of respect from the others affects the persona. The little boy cried because his little confidence is daunted by the booming laughter of the assembly.
However, when one has the self-esteem, everything is very different. He has the self-confidence to give commands to the group and the strength to lead the group, thus giving him the recognition and respect he desired. Just like Jack. “Jack was loud and active. He gave orders, sang, whistled, threw remarks at the silent Ralph” (p. 72).
It can be remembered that Piggy is used to be ignored and neglected. But when he knew that Ralph had already accepted him, his self-confidence is developed. Consequently, he hit two birds in one stone: he got the strength to boldly face Jack and he got the recognition he dreams to have since the first day he’s trapped in the island.
I’m going to him with this conch in my hands… I’m going to say, you’re stronger than I am and you haven’t got asthma… But I don’t ask for my glasses back, not as a favor. I don’t ask you to be sport… not because you’re strong, but because what’s right’s right. Give me my glasses… you got to! (p. 171)

The Need for Self-actualization
The need for self-actualization is the need found at the uppermost portion of Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs (as cited in Green, 2000). This need specifies the actualization of a person --- in this instance, the characters in the novel Lord of the Flies by William Golding. In order to achieve this last necessity, the boys in the novel do the role they think is best suited for them.
The first self-actualization issue tackled in the novel is the “who-should-be-the-leader issue.” This matter concerns Ralph and Jack. Since Ralph is voted as the chief, he acts as the leader of the group. He is the one who accepts the task of “dividing labors” (p. 33) and “implementing rules” (p. 80 - 81). However, Jack Merridew, the leader of the choir boys that turned into a group of hunters, wanted to be the overall leader. Even in the beginning, when the election for chief started, he voiced out a statement that proved his eagerness to be a leader, “I ought to be chief (he said with simple arrogance), because I’m chapter chorister and head boy. I can sing C sharp” (p. 22). Yet, the boys elected Ralph; hence, Jack became the leader of the hunters.
Jack takes pleasure in the hunting adventures he had. Nonetheless, he’s still not contented on becoming the hunter. He started to question Ralph’s authority. “And you shut up! Who are you, anyway? Sitting there telling people what to do. You can’t hunt, you can’t sing ---” (p. 91). This situation shows that Jack questioned Ralph’s authority by comparing Ralph’s capabilities to his own. Jack’s action is normal for Thomas Hobbes (as cited in Fromm & Xirau, 1968) believes that man finds happiness by “comparing himself with other men” (p. 37). Man thinks that he’s cleverer than the others; hence, he is capable of “overseeing the public much better” (p. 37).
The second self-actualization issue discussed in the novel is “where-should-I-belong” issue. This matter concerns all the boys in the novel, except Ralph and Jack. This issue determines the boys’ need to know who they are and what they really wanted to be. After some time, Maurice, Roger, and Robert, together with some of the littluns, preferred to be under Jack’s savage group (p. 133). On the other hand, Ralph, Simon, and Piggy remained to the peace-seeking society they had created.

Decisions and Actions of Man
Using Maslow’s Theory on the Hierarchy of Needs and Freud’s Theory on Human Personality, the researchers would find out how the decisions and actions of the characters in the novel define the true nature of man.
In achieving the five human needs, Jack follows the epicurean or the pleasure-seeking instinct of man. Never getting complete gratification in eating fruits, he further hunts for meat. To provide the need for protection, he promises to break the rules. “Bollocks to the rules! … If there’s a beast, we’ll hunt it down! We’ll close and beat and beat and beat ---” (p.91)! Instead of asking for fire from Ralph’s group, he summoned (tense consistency previous sentences use present) his tribe to steal Piggy’s specs. Having not contented of getting everyone’s trust, he still planned to kill Ralph. These decisions and actions brought bad incidents to the island. They caused the unrestrained killing of the sow, the brutal murder of Simon and Piggy, and the unanticipated separation of the boys in the island. However, despite the fact that Jack’s decisions and actions may harm the other boys, he continues to do them because of the satisfaction he attains after doing such. This shows the animalistic nature of man.
In contrast to Jack’s malevolent decisions and actions is Piggy’s rational thinking. Each day, Piggy lives in the island taking in consideration all the norms he had learned from his previous world. He always thinks what adults would have done if they were on their (the boys’) shoes. He thinks how the adults would have reacted if they will come to know how the boys in the island lived. Though he depends greatly on Ralph to achieve his basic needs, Piggy never allowed (tense consistency) his hedonistic nature to control him. Throughout his lifetime, Piggy always stands for what the society has called “good”.
On the other hand, Ralph’s decisions and actions are determined by his civilizing instinct for order. His decisions and actions do not only takes in consideration the wants and needs of his id but also distinguishes it using his superego. In other words, unlike the id that only seek for one’s desire not caring what methods he/she use to achieve it, Ralph (ego) weighs is (check) methods of satisfying the need without doing something evil. It can be seen in the story that Ralph’s decisions and actions are greatly affected by Jack (id) and Piggy (superego). For instance, though he also wants the thrill experienced by hunters in the reenactment of the killing of the sow, he did not let his desire take control of him because like Piggy, he thinks it is wrong to do what Jack and the others do.
Nature of Man in the novel Lord of the Flies
The novel depicts man as innately evil in nature, that without the constraints of civilization, society and rules, man goes back to his primordial self and becomes a savage, prioritizing only what he desires and not caring on the effects his action causes to other people. William Golding was able to portray that man is innately evil by creating a microcosm of the society wherein the big boys act as the council of leaders that creates the laws and regulation of their own society. Golding was able to depict clearly how civilized men, at the start of his novel, turned into savages. Golding discussed the background of the story in an essay entitled Fable (as cited in McClean, 2010). It states:
Before the second World War I believed in the perfectability of social man; that a correct structure of society produced goodwill; and that therefore you could remove all social ills by a reorganisation of society. It is possible that I believe something of the same again; but after the war I did not because I was unable to.
I had discovered what one man could do to another. I’m not talking of one man killing another with a gun, or dropping a bomb on him or blowing him up or torpedoing him. I am thinking of the vileness beyond all words that went on, year after year, in the totalitarian states.
They were not done by the head hunters of New Guinea, or by some primitive tribe in the Amazon. They were done, skillfully, coldly, by educated men, doctors, lawyers, by men with a tradition of civilisation behind them, to beings of their own kind. I must say that anyone who moved through those years without understanding that man produces evil as a bee produces honey, must have been blind or wrong in the head. p. 1

Since the boys in the story were isolated from adult guidance and care, there was a need to unite and help each other so that they would survive the dangers they might encounter in the island. Upon creating their group, they tried to imitate what adults do in the real world. They elected their own leader and created their own laws and rules bringing forth their own society. The conch in the novel was the very symbol of the society that they created. The only person who could speak out in the meeting was the person who holds the conch. The conch symbolizes the authority and power of the holder and order of their society. The conch’s sound that resonates throughout the island made it possible to call and unite them when they first crashed in the island. When they formed their group, the conch was used to call the meetings and put them in order when someone’s holding it.
However, as the story goes on, the authority that the conch represents slowly faded away when their attachment and influence to the real world, to the civilization they used to live in, gradually decreased the longer they stayed in the island. As Ralph, one of the main characters in the novel, would phrase it, “The world, that understandable and lawful world, was slipping away” (Golding, 1954, p. 91). Little by little they revealed their true nature.
One example of how these boys change is as follows:
They knew very well why he (Jack) hadn’t: because of the enormity of the knife descending and cutting into living flesh; because of the unbearable blood. p. 31
At first, they were very scared of killing the pig but when they stayed longer in the island, their attitude towards killing changed. Golding (1954) phrased:
[…] and the hunters followed, wedded to her in lust, excited by the long chase and the dropped blood. […]The sow collapsed under them and they were heavy and fulfilled upon her. […] This time Robert and Maurice acted the two parts; and Maurice’s acting of the pig’s efforts to avoid the advancing spear was so funny that the boys cried with laughter. p. 148

They began to enjoy killing the pig and from that their inner savage instincts began to awaken. From doing simple acts of violence, they had become accustomed to doing violence itself that had later evolved into a much graver crime which was murder. In the novel of Golding (1954) there were two instances that murder was committed to their fellow comrades. The first death happened when they were having another reenactment of the way they killed the sow, then Simon came out coming from the forest:
Simon was crying out something about a dead man on a hill. “Kill the beast! Cut his throat! Spill his blood! Do him in!” (Boys) The sticks fell and the mouth of the new circle crunched and screamed. The beast was on its knees in the center, its arms folded over its face. It was crying out against the abominable noise something about a body on the hill. The beast struggled forward, broke the ring and fell over the steep edge of the rock to the sand by the water. At once the crowd surged after it, poured down the rock, leapt on to the beast, screamed, struck, bit, tore. There were no words, and no movements but the tearing of teeth and claws. p. 152

After that incident, they let themselves believe that what they killed was the beast in disguised as Simon. Another death follows:
The rock struck Piggy a glancing blow from chin to knee; the conch exploded into a thousand white fragments and ceased to exist. Piggy, saying nothing, with no time for even a grunt, traveled through the air sideways from the rock, turning over as he went. The rock bounded twice and was lost in the forest. Piggy fell forty feet and landed on his back across the square red rock in the sea. His head opened and stuff came out and turned red. Piggy’s arms and legs twitched a bit, like a pig’s after it has been killed. p. 189

By Simon’s death, man’s nature is still ambiguous because there is still a question if incident was an accident considering how dark when the crime happened and how the atmosphere at that time was filled with excitement of killing the sow. Nevertheless, another death follows, the murder of Piggy. There is no question to the gravity of the intent to really kill him. There was no excuse of the act and it was done with no guilt. After seeing Piggy’s death, Jack said, “See? See? That’s what you’ll get! I meant that! There isn’t a tribe for you anymore! The conch is gone— […] I’m chief” (p. 190)! This marked the total loss of moral reasoning and rational thinking of the boys, the perfect act showing how innocent boys had turned into ruthless savages caring only of what they want. The thought of being rescued was lost and the society that was once created was ruined same as how the conch that embodied authority and order was shattered into pieces.

bernales colonia chap 6(comments in parentheses in between sentences)

CHAPTER VI
SUMMARY OF FINDINGS, CONCLUSIONS, AND RECOMMENDATIONS

SUMMARY OF FINDINGS
The study aimed to determine the effects of romantic relationship to the academic performance of UP Cebu BS Computer Science 2 students. Data needed are gathered through the distribution of survey questionnaires to the students of the sample population who are involved in romantic relationship in order to attain the objectives.
The summary of finding is as follows:
1. The results indicate that majority of the BS Computer Science 2 students who were (the previous sentence is who are) involved in romantic relationship have decreased their general weighted average from the first semester to the second semester of the academic year 2011-2012.
2. The results show that the respondents spent more time with their partner than in studying. This is evident in their weighted mean. The time spent in studying acquired a weighted mean of 3 while the time spent with partner acquired a weighted mean of 6.a (why there is a? what doe those figures mean?)
3. The results reveal that the respondents’ level of motivation as a student considering the involvement in romantic relationship is neutral. This is evident in the average mean of 3.3. (which means what?)
4. The results show that the respondents’ level of anxiety is low since it acquired an average mean of 2.2.
5. The results suggest that there is a positive correlation (r = 0.27) between the time spent in studying and the academic performance but is not statistically significant (t= 0.79 < 1.860). Meaning to say, though there is a slight relationship between the academic performance and time spent in studying, there is no enough statistical evidence found in the data which shows that academic performance is depends on the time spent in studying.
6. The results denote that there is a significant (t = -1.13, beyond 1.860) negative correlation(r = -0.37) between the time spent with the partner and the academic performance of the BS Computer Science 2 students who were involved in romantic relationship. Findings indicate that the more time spent by the respondents with their partner, decrease of academic performance also followed. Moreover, data gathered from the interview also supported the results. The respondents were more pressured in managing their time the moment their romantic partners call or would like to communicate them. They showed that their romantic partners are given the priority instead of studying, making projects, or assignments and the like, thus making the academic performance gets affected.
7. The results depict that the correlation between the respondents’ level of motivation and academic performance is very low which is equal to 0.006. Meaning to say, the change in the grades of the respondents was not dependent on their level of motivation. This can be deduced from the data wherein a respondent who has a score of 3.6 in the level of motivation has a positive score in academic performance while another respondent who is in the same level of motivation has a negative score in academic performance.

8. The results show that there is a significant inverse correlation between that (faulty) the level of anxiety of the respondents and their academic performance. It is evident in the correlation value of -0.61 which is negative and in the computed t value of -2.18 which is beyond the tabulated value. In addition, a respondent also confirmed this by saying that there are situations associated with romantic relationships (such as break-ups, conflicts, etc.) which can cause distraction to the students’ studies because of the pain that these situations brought up.





CONCLUSIONS
The main objective of the study was to determine the effects romantic relationship to the academic performance of the UP Cebu BS Computer Science 2 students. It aimed to determine the status of time management of the BS Computer Science 2 students and also their levels of motivation and anxiety as students. It also aimed to determine if the variables such as the time management, levels of motivation, and levels of anxiety which are part of a romantic relationship are significantly related to the academic performance.
Based on the results of the study, it was found out that there is significant effect of romantic relationship on the academic performance of the UP BS Computer Science 2 students.
Adolescent stage is the time when people started looking for their romantic partner. For the BS Computer Science 2 students who are involved in romantic relationship, it can be noticed that they are more focused on their romantic relationship. They were not able to balance their time between romantic relationship and academics.
Since college life is not easy due to the increase of workloads and greater responsibilities given to the students, students who spend more time with their partner left the academics into suffer (awakward, revise). On the other hand, the researchers found out that there is a significant inverse relationship on between the levels of anxiety and academic performance, thus, the higher their level of anxiety, the lower will be their academic performance.
However, it was found out that respondents’ anxiety as students is only in the low level when it comes to their general perception.
Since most of the respondents’ scores in academic performance are very low, it can be deduced that the time spent with their partner has the greatest negative impact on their academic performance of UP BS Computer Science 2 students.
In conclusion, if students are involved in a romantic relationship, a higher level of anxiety that the students would experience in a romantic relationship would indicate a great possibility that it would offer negative effects to their academic performance. Yet, BS Computer Science 2 students who are involved in romantic relationship have reported that they have a low level of anxiety as students. It can be implied that there is no other factor that greatly affects the negative academic performance of the UP BS Computer Science 2 students but the time they spent with their partner.
(very good conclusion)







RECOMMENDATIONS
The study aimed to determine the effects of romantic relationship on the academic performance of BS Computer Science 2 students in UP Cebu. This study covers only a small part of the population of adolescents who are involved in romantic relationship with which the researchers cannot generalize it for all the adolescents who are involved in romantic relationships. Thus, for the researchers who will be going to research more about the effects of romantic relationship in the academic performance of the student, we highly recommend that there must be will (faulty) gather respondents in a wider range since this study is just focused on the views of only 10 respondents from the University of the Philippines BSCS II students. Moreover, limited respondents may affect the precision of the results of the study.
For the BS Computer Science 2 students, the researchers recommend that if they(will) involve (themselves) in a romantic relationship, they must balance their time management in order not to affect their academic performance. In addition, for students who are involved in a relationship and for those who are planning to get involved, we recommend that they should be aware of the anxieties that romantic relationship would bring so that they could manage themselves to cope up with the problems that would meet in this relationship.
It is also recommended that parents may allow their siblings to involve in a romantic relationship since it contributes to the development of adolescents for a better committed relationship in the future. However, together with it must be the guidance that the academic performance of their siblings will not be affected.

perez tabaloc chap 5 (comments in parentheses in between sentences)

Chapter V
PRESENTATION, INTERPRETATION, AND ANALYSIS OF DATA
RESPONDENT’S PROFILE
The respondent’s profile is indicated in the first part of the questionnaire. The researchers specified in chapter IV that this current study has three different types of respondents; the askal dog owners, the purebred dog owners, and the non-dog owners. As stated in chapter IV, because these respondents differ in some cases, the researchers decided to provide a different questionnaire and different sets of questions for each of the type of respondent.
The researchers (chose) have chosen five (5) askal dog owners, five (5) purebred dog owners, and five (5) non-dog owners. There are a total of fifteen (15) people as respondents that are extracted from the population of the first year college students from UP Cebu regardless of what their course is. In addition, the researchers have also chosen five (5) askal dog owners, five (5) purebred dog owners, and five (5) non-dog owners with the summation of fifteen (15) respondents from the population of the second year college students of the same institution. (past tense) These respondents are official enrollees of the university for the first semester of the school year 2011 – 2012.
The table presented (on) next page shows the distribution of respondents in the first year UP Cebu students. (choppy.join. up cebu students to emphasize that the…)The table next page is purposively presented by the researchers to emphasize that the respondents are chosen regardless of their course. Furthermore, the table also shows the total number of students and the exact numerical distribution of the respondents in accordance to what kind of dog owner they are.
Table1. Distribution of Respondents in
First Year UP Cebu Students
Course Askal
Dog
Owners Purebred
Dog
Owners Non-Dog
Owners
BS Computer Science 3 2
BS Mathematics
BS Management 2 1
BS Biology 1 1
BA Mass Communication 1 2
BA Political Science
BA Psychology 1
Fine Arts 1
TOTAL 5 5 5
The table above is the precise distribution of respondents in the first year UP Cebu college students. Moreover, the table below presents the distribution of respondents in the second year UP Cebu college students.
Table2. Distribution of Respondents in
Second Year UP Cebu Students
Course Askal
Dog
Owners Purebred
Dog
Owners Non-Dog Owners
BS Computer Science 3 4 1
BS Mathematics
BS Management 3
BS Biology
BA Mass Communication 1 1
BA Political Science 1
BA Psychology
Fine Arts 1
TOTAL 5 5 5
Based on the information tabulated in Table 1 and 2, the current study has a total of 30 respondents. As stated earlier, this (these) 30 respondents are grouped according to what kind of dog owners they are. Furthermore, the first group is the group of (the first group comprises the askal….) askal dog owners that is composed of the five (5) 1st year and five (5) 2nd year college students. The second group is composed of five (5) 1st year and 2nd year pure-breed dogs. Moreover, the final group to complete the number of respondents will be (shift in tense) the group of those respondents that do not own any type of dog. The group of non-dog owners will also have ten (10) members. (shift in tense)
In (remove in.start with the next part..) the next part of this chapter presented the interpretation and the analysis of the data gathered from the answers of the respondents in the given questionnaire. The consistency of the answers of the respondents are weighed. More importantly, the comparison between the answers of these three distinct groups are done to answer the sub-problems and the main problem of this current study. The researchers used bar graphs as visual presentations for a clear comparison of opinions between the three groups.
The next part of this chapter presents all the data gathered from the respondents on the first set of statements, which is the “Impression on Askals”.
A. Impression on Askals
There are five (5) statements in this set. And these statements are general stereotypes on Askal dogs. Askal dog owners, purebred dog owners, and non-dog owners have given their opinions in this set of statements.
1. It is okay to feed askals table scraps (lamaw).
The first statement in the set is; (comma, not semi colon) “It is okay to feed askals table scraps (lamaw).” This statement has been formulated by the researchers as one of the common stereotypes on Askal dogs due to common community ideas that askals eat almost everything given to them. Furthermore, askal owners feeding their dogs table scraps is a usual and natural scenario in the community today.
notes:
i will not continue reading and examining all details yet since i spotted the same mistakes in the first draft which you have not addressed yet.examine again your first draft, take closely the corrections, esp the punctuation, subject verb agreement, vague sentences and going round the bush (balik-balik) sentences.once you are done, repost and label it 3rd draft.

bartolay cueva chap 5&6(see comments)

CHAPTER V
Presentation, Interpretation and Analysis of Data
Respondents’ Profile
Before the researchers conducted the survey, the respondents were asked first if they had seen the whole episode of the Boys Over Flowers movie.
After the survey was conducted, researchers gathered the data and organized it into tables, pies and bar graphs. Accordingly, this whole chapter studies and analyzes the gathered data. Findings from this chapter will serve as basis for the conclusion of this research.
The growing population of teenagers is dominating the population at large nowadays. These teenagers with an age bracket from 13-18, are consequently affected by their surroundings and environment. They are also easily influenced by media and is (grammar) the target of this researchers. Now, the researchers measures (subject verb issue) whether the concerned female teenagers are affected by the Boys Over Flowers movies in their preferences towards their ideal guys.
Moreover, the chosen respondents were 20 first year female students of the University of the Philippines-Cebu.
Researchers assumed that teenagers especially within the age bracket of 16 to 18 are in the stage of puberty and are prone to social influences. Moreover, they are exposed to media, most specifically to the television. They had been (remove been) watched the full episode of Boys Over Flowers.
Thus, the following evaluation tables, pies and bar graphs (assess the respondents’ preference for their ideal guy) are served as an assessment of the respondents’ preference for their ideal guy.
A. Physical Attribute (intro to this)
A.1

The pie graph in A1 entails the respondents’ frequency of likeness to the hair of a guy. It shows that 16 respondents like guys who have straight hair while only 4 (four) respondents like guys who have curly hair.
The result indicates that 80% of the respondents like their ideal guy to have straight hair. Moreover, only 20% of the respondents like curly-haired guys. Thus, this indication implies (redundant. Either indicates or implies) that they like straight haired guys because it is look more attractive in their straight hair picture because of the way the light hits their face and the angle, making their face appear slimmer. (fused error.rephrase)
The next figure presents the data concerning the likeness of the females to their ideal guys’ nose. (intro to nose)
notes:
1. please fix/evaluate the errors above and apply the same comments to the rest of the chapter. These errors are also found on the other parts:
a. there is always an introduction or description for each attribute before presenting a table.
b. analyze and interpret the result well. give a detailed explanation.avoid shortcut.
c. implies or indicates means the same thing.do not use both.
d. subject should agree with its verb.

another point:
there is no matching of the results on physical traits, attitudes or lifetyles between their ideal guy and those of boys over flowers. do they match? the last part which asks the respondents whether they were affected or not is not valid and reliable.You compare their answers in ideal guy preferences and qualities they like from boys over flowers characters and see if these qualities match.dont rush the submission.make sure that your paper is well written, and results well analyzed. this also applies to your chap 6. evaluate again.

cavanlit chap 1 (check my comments in parentheses in between sentences)

CHAPTER I
INTRODUCTION

Rationale of the Study
As I walk towards the AS Building of the University of the Philippines –Cebu College, I can see the guard watching television and as I walk closer, I see people sitting above the ledge with their laptops on and some rich kids with their handy tablets. As I went to the third floor (shift in tense), I can still see students that are sitting on the stairs, trying to maximize the use of their laptops. As I open the old door of AS 243, I can already smell the feel of technology trying to entice me to get in. As I stared straight, I saw (shift in tense)another student using his laptop while his Beats by Dr. Dre hanging on his head and playing some good music unto him. As I watched the whole room, I saw around ten students trying to fix their programs while reaching for help with the website that will never let you down, Google. As I glanced at the glass divider, I saw a much greater group of younger students who are also accessing the computers. You see, computers are all around us. (shift in tense)
First of all, what is a computer? (change.cliche) It is an automated, fast rule following, non-innovative machine, remembers information, and basically makes our lives easier. For the past years, good news about the advantages of computers have been the headlines of newspapers, online newspapers, magazines, and even in worldwide telecast news. But what if these advantages of using the computers were just a partial effect of something that is greater, something that is negative, and something that can lead to the deterioration of the human mind’s performance. (?)
These computers are somehow already a part of our lives but as we all know, certain issues about these computers have already been raised. Computer disadvantages includes (subject verb issue) Violation of Privacy, Impact on Labor Force, Health Risks and Impact on the Environment since Computer manufacturing processes and computer waste are depleting natural resources and polluting the environment.
Thompson (as cited in Carr, 2008) said that having these computers is a great privilege. But the privilege has its price, (comma splice) McLuhan (as cited in Carr, 2008) stressed out that, “Media are not just passive channels of information, they supply the stuff of thought, but they also shape the process of thought.”
Earlier last year, another disadvantage of media devices (basically personal computers) has been spotted. Elias (2005) said that most kids today do not focus on their tasks as much compared to kids before as based on the observations of school psychologists and teachers. Walsh (as cited by Elias, 2005) who conducted about 150 workshops a year, entailing about media for parents and teachers stated that, "It's become harder over the last 10 years to keep kids' attention. The expectation is to be constantly entertained and, if they're not entertained, they quickly lose interest.”
Basically, this because (fusing error) that we humans are greatly reactive to change and can easily adapt to new things compared to other beings because of the prefrontal cortex (comma) said by Greenfield (2009). She also added that when this prefrontal cortex is harmed, it one does not become impaired, (check) but only shows symptoms of changes in behavior, such as: being more inattentive or careless, loss of sense of “sequence and consequence” and which also leads to poor attention span and even small memory.
If there already is a great negative effect on general people that are not that much inclined to computers, the researchers have inquisitively asked their selves, what more could the effect be to those people that have jobs that are inclined to computers. And also to the students that are mostly exposed to these media devices such as Computer Science students, Computer Engineering students, Information Technology students, or basically almost every student in our current society. (fragment, not a sentence)
Students at school would obviously use their memory in learning but as previously stated, computer usage can actually affect the human minds, especially in memory. Retention or the ability to retain facts and figures in memory would obviously be affected with this sudden disadvantage of computers.
If we are to dig deeper on these student’s lives, some of them actually catch up with their lessons with the help of computers, but ironically, these computers can alter their minds giving them changes in behavior, such as: being more inattentive or careless, loss of sense of “sequence and consequence” and which also leads to poor attention span and even small memory. (the last clause is awkward)
Describing the irony of the study briefly, “How can you study with the use of these computers when in fact these computers would lessen your capability of studying?” (you?shift in person. One paragraph stating the need or purpose of your study based on the situation given earlier)




Statement of the Problem (change everything to past tense (except the objectives and sub problems) since the study is already done)
The study aims to determine if the number of hours spent in using the computer affects the degree of retention or the ability to recall what has been learned from class lectures of selected second year Computer Science A.Y. 2011-2012.
In order for the main problem to be solved the researchers must give solution to this series of questions:

1. What is the profile of the respondent in terms of academic capability and computer ability during the previous semester?
a. General Weighted Average
b. Grades on Major Subjects (e.g. CMSC11, CMSC21)
c. Number of years since first usage of computer.
2. How many hours in one day does the respondent spend in using the computer in the following locations?
a. School b. Home
3. What is the retention ability level of the respondents toward class lectures?
4. Is there a relationship between retention and number of hours of computer usage?
5. What are the fields of interests of the respondent that may affect or determine his retention ability?
6. What other factors that may/might affect the respondent’s level of retention?
a. Teacher
b. Environment
c. Topic

Objectives of the Study
1. To determine if the number of hours spent in using the computer affects the degree of retention or the ability to recall what has been learned from class lectures of selected second year Computer Science A.Y. 2011-2012.
2. To know more about the profile of the respondent in terms of academic capability and computer ability during the previous semester through their grades on the previous semester, grades on major subjects and most of all, the number of years since their first usage of computer.
3. To measure the computer usage (in hours) of the respondents in two different locations; at school and at home.
4. To find the retention ability level of the respondents toward class lectures.
5. To identify the relationship between retention and number of hours of computer usage.
6. To decipher the fields of interests of the respondent that may affect or determine his retention ability.
7. To categorize the external factors that may/might affect the respondent’s level of retention, such as teacher, environment and topic.





Significance of the Study
The existence of computers is already not new to us, so studies concerning about it would greatly affect the society. Determining the existence of a significant relationship (if ever there is) between the number of hours of computer usage to the retention ability of the students would affect not just the cyber world but also the different sectors in the society.
The first beneficiaries of this study are basically the respondents or the Computer Science students. The results of this study will basically affect their lifestyle and how they interact with their computers. Moreover, Computer Science students might be more cautious in staying late with their personal computers.
The study would (will) basically affect the entire student body since everyone in the society has varying dependencies on computers. The results of this study will benefit them in such a way that their awareness about the various effects of computers maybe broadened and that this awareness may lead them into self-improvement and a more cautious approach among computers. (rephrase. state simply)
Awareness about this certain field will not also be centered to the students but also to the parents. The results of the study might help the parents in controlling the student’s exposure to computers and other media devices.
The second parents (who are they?) of the students are also (will) benefited with the results of the study. With the help of the results, the teachers might want to reconsider too much involvement of media devices during class lectures. If the students would have low retention ability levels due to their computer usage, the teachers might find new and more effective teaching techniques that will aid the students in the topic.
Since the study is more on the effects of computer usage on the retention ability level of students, the cyber world would be greatly affected with the results. Avid computer users worldwide might change their computer habits or maybe find solutions in solving this certain phenomena.
Lastly are the forthcoming researchers that would want to provide a more in-depth treatment regarding the subject matter (fragment). This study might be of great help as a reference material onto any information (revise) that these future researchers would want to acquire in their upcoming studies.(vague)

bernales colonia chap 1 (comments in parentheses in between sentences)

CHAPTER 1 (2ND DRAFT)

CHAPTER I
INTRODUCTION
RATIONALE
During adolescence, teens become interested and involved in dating because of the desire to belong with others. As a result, it is clear that over the time, romantic relationships gain in importance.Adolescents crave to have an intimate romantic relationship to where (check) love is given and received without restriction. It is according to the need to belong theory by which individuals have the urge (tighten) to connect with others in enduring, close relationships. Furthermore, the theory states that humans “share” the same need to be a part or connected with other individuals, and claims that all individuals may live life better if they are connected. Myers (2010) supported the need to belong theory by asserting that people who find a person complimenting their needs to whom they can share their problems (with), makes them (referent? Who?) more acknowledgeable. Belongingness is supported by close, intimate relationship which tends to be healthier and happier.
Because of this need to belong, we can see nowadays that most university students have synchronized their time in both academic and romantic aspect (check subject verb). Engaging themselves in this romantic relationship enables them to feel that someone cares for them, shows affection to them, loves them, etc. In fact, Furman (2002) reported that romantic relationships become more and more significant to adolescents in their social world as they also develop from puberty towards late adolescence in which it shows how prevalent is romantic relationship among adolescents.
Moreover, some students on the University of the Philippines Cebu College have also involved themselves in a romantic relationship. Having been in an institution which promotes honor and excellence among its students gave them a great challenge to maintain a good academic performance. Considering that each professor has higher expectations on (of) the students, an increase of workloads which includes projects, school papers, reports and challenging exams were given. Therefore, being college students of UP Cebu College gives them more responsibility and it requires a great amount of time and attention.
In addition, Myers (2010) said that relationships also consume much of the life of university students. It is proven in the study of Mehl & Pennebaker (2003) conducted to 11 students (using Electronically Activated Recorder for each participant) of the University of Texas at Austin, that 28 percent of the students’ waking hours were spent just by talking to their romantic partners and it did not include the time they spent in listening to their romantic partners. Another study (Steinhauer & Holson, 2008) cited by Myers (2010) found that an average American 13-18 years old sent or received 1,742 test messages per month. Most often these young texters have been involved in romantic relationships.
(transition from the previous paragraph?)Research conducted by Campbell & Oliver(1994) found benefits in having a romantic relationship such as companionship, feeling of happiness or elation, exclusivity, feeling loved or loving another, intimacy, self-growth and self-understanding, and more positive self-esteem. These benefits found in a romantic relationship are said to be the cause of motivation of the students in pursuing their studies.
However, Campbell & Oliver (1994) also pointed out some costs which are found in a romantic relationship, namely: stress and worry about the relationship, social and nonsocial sacrifices, increased dependence on the partner, fights, time and effort investment, and feeling worse about the self which are said to be the causes of anxiety of the students.
Having been in these situations, UP Cebu students who are in a relationship may be faced with the challenge in maintaining a good academic performance as “Iskolars ng Bayan”. UP students have greater responsibility to do well in their studies since it is the nation which subsidized most of its students to provide them a quality education.
Consequently, a question on the effect of romantic relationship among the students involved, whether they can manage their time efficiently or not still remains. Moreover, determining the vital role of motivation and anxiety in the life of the romantic partners and how they affect their academic performance still remain a problem.
In order to answer these problems, this study was aimed to determine the effects of romantic relationship on the academic performance of UP BS Computer Science 2 students who are involved in a romantic relationship. In this, status of time management was investigated as well as the levels of motivation and anxiety of the students. Lastly, this study aimed to determine if there is a relationship between the time management, levels of motivation and anxiety and the academic performance of the students.


STATEMENT OF THE PROBLEM
The main thrust of the study was to determine the effect of romantic relationships to the academic performance of male and female BS Computer Science 2 students of the University of the Philippines Cebu College (A.Y. 2011-2012, First Sem) who were involved in a romantic relationship during the academic year 2010-2011.
Specifically, this study seeks (past) to answer the following questions:
1. What is the profile of the respondents in terms of:
a. gender,
b. general weighted average in the A.Y 2010-2011 1st sem,
c. general weighted average in the A.Y. 2010-2011 2ndsem?
2. What is the status of time management of the respondents:
a. in studying,
b. with their partner?
3. What is the level of anxiety of the respondents in playing their role as a student?
4. What is the level of motivation of the respondents in playing their role as a student?
5. Is there a significant relationship between the academic performance and time management of the respondents?
6. Is there a significant correlation between academic performance and :
a. levels of anxiety,
b. levels of motivation?

OBJECTIVES OF THE STUDY
The main objective of the study is to determine the effects of romantic relationship on the academic performance of UP Cebu College BS Computer Science 2 (A.Y. 2011-2012, First Sem) male and female students who were involved in a romantic relationship during the academic year 2010-2011. (tense consistency with the previous sentences)
In order to answer the main problem, the study has the following specific objectives:
1. To determine the profile of the respondents in terms of:
• gender,
• general weighted average in the A.Y. 2010-2011 first sem,
• general weighted average in the A.Y. 2010-2011 second sem.
2. To determine the status of the time management of the respondents:
• in studying,
• with their partner.
3. To determine the levels of motivation of the respondents in playing their role
as a student.
4. To determine the level of anxiety of the respondents in playing their role as a
student.

5. To determine whether there is a significant correlation between time
management of the respondents and their academic performance.
6. To determine whether there is a significant correlation between the levels of
motivation/anxiety of the respondents and their academic performance.

SIGNIFICANCE OF THE STUDY
This study aims (tense) to determine the effects of romantic relationship on the academic performance of BS Computer Science 2 students of academic year 2011-2012. This will (past) also find out how the UP BS Computer Science 2 students manage their time in which study and romantic side is involved. Additionally, it determines the levels of motivation and anxiety of the respondents.
This study highlights the effect of time management, motivation and anxiety level of students who are involved in romantic relationship on their academic performance. The result of this study would alarm the student and raise their awareness on the effects of romantic relationship to (on) the academic performance of a student especially on its negative effects. These concluded data would also make the students who are involved in romantic relationship assess their time management between romantic and academic aspects.
Findings of this study would also raise the awareness of the parents of the students who are synchronizing their time in both academic and romantic side (awkward). These findings could benefit them so that they could guide their children on how to balance time wisely, and as parents, they are tasked to motivate their children to prioritize their study and set-aside/minimize factors of romantic relationship(i.e., more frequent interaction with the partner) which can affect the academic performance of their children.
For the teachers, the information that they would get in this study would help them guide and give proper attention to their students who are involved in romantic relationship so that teachers could also help in increasing the academic performance of their students not just by teaching them lessons on the course/subjects they handled.

Wednesday, October 12, 2011

peras, lariosa chap 2(comments in parentheses in between sentences)

CHAPTER IV
RESEARCH METHODOLOGY
This chapter presents the research design, the method of research, research environment, sampling procedure, participants of the study, instruments and data analysis. This research study intends to determine the factors affecting the adjustment period of UPCC foreign students to their new school environment. The researchers want to know whether factors like language, cultural differences and teaching style really affect the adjustment period of UPCC foreign students to their new school environment. In addition, the researchers want to know the respondents’ view of the Filipino culture and how do they find it compared to their own culture. The researchers want to know whether foreign students have any interest towards the Filipino culture or they do not bother learning the host country’s culture.
RESEARCH DESIGN
This study entitled “Factors Affecting the Adjustment Period of UPCC Foreign Students to their New School Environment” is a qualitative research that attempts to gather information and data concerning the factors that affect the foreign students in adjusting to their new school environment. Descriptive method of research that uses surveys andgathers information about the present existing situation will be used. The purpose of using this method is to show the nature of the foreign students adjusting in their new schools, as it is still happening at the time of the study and to discover the reasons for this. The researchers agree to use this kind of research to obtain first hand data from the respondents.(define what is descriptive method, purpose…)
RESEARCH ENVIRONMENT
This study will be conducted at the University of the Philippines Cebu College (UPCC) Gorordo Avenue Lahug Cebu City. The place is readily accessible for the researchers. The researchers choose UPCC since the respondents are studying in the said school and are more available when it comes to distributing the survey questionnaires.
RESEARCH PARTICIPANTS
The research participants comprise all the foreign students studying in the University of the Philippines Cebu College (UPCC). There are only 7 foreign students and all of them are under the Humanities Division. Some are taking up Mass Communication and the others are taking up Fine Arts.4 of them are Korean, 2 are Japanese and 1Australian.
RESEARCH INSTRUMENT
The researchers are going to use the two most common types of research tools, surveys and interviews. The researchers will be making survey questionnaires about the foreign students and the new situation they are facing, the culture shock they are experiencing and the difficulties that they have encountered with it, as well as the things that made their adjustment easier in order to point out what factors mainly affected their adjustment to the new school environment The survey was divided into four 3 parts (what is It), Education, Language, and Culture. Under Education are about the foreign students’ situation towards their new school environment, including the physical factors and as well as the social treatment of the students, teachers and faculty staff towards the foreign student. On the Language part (weak, change) will be the experiences and difficulties met in communicating with the Filipino people using the language they chose to use. And lastly, under Culture are the cultural differences of the foreign students’ country and the host country, how they did find the differences, and how did they adopt and adjust towards the differences (use active verb.rephrase). In addition, since the respondents are foreign and the researchers have no idea of the respondent’s proficiency in English, the researchers will make the questions as simple as possible.
The researchers think that the information that will be gathered from the foreign students will be limited to their point of view only so the researchers decided to interview their classmates. The researchers also will conduct an interview to the foreign students’ classmates in order to gather more data, not just from the foreign students, but also from the observation of their classmates.
DATA COLLECTION
The survey questionnaires and the interviews will be used to collect the data that will be conducted by the researchers. In order for the data not to be biased, where in the foreign students might copy from another student’s answer, the researchers are going to be around during the answering of the survey sheets. Moreover, there will be no time limit in order not to pressure the respondents.
Additionally, there will be questionnaires and guide questions prepared for the interview of the foreign students’ classmates. In the process, the interviewer will not give side comments or share her own opinions that might influence the interviewee’s answers.
By the time the survey sheets will be given and the respondents will be interviewed, the researchers have already asked permissions from the respondents.
DATA ANALYSIS
Data gathered will be collected and analysed in order to allow the researchers to attain an understanding of the research problem. Afterwards, the researchers will then summarize the information gathered and draw a conclusion from it. (not detailed.explain the process of analyzing your data)
Note: change the tense from future to past tense, since the study is already done.

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Among the related literature gathered and reviewed by the researchers are theories, concepts, and ideas that would help determine the specific variables of the study. These help specify the primary and most common factors that would affect the adjustment period of the foreign students upon residing into a new country.
In the writings of Hammer (1992), he implied that international students have several difficulties as they reside to a new environment. He pointed out four general areas to be covered: “the problems of sojourners to encountering a new cultural environment, the influence of social interaction and communication on sojourner adaptation, and the culture learning process apparent in the cross-cultural sojourn.” With this statement and with the chosen subject of the study, the foreign students would be the center of the framework. As analyzed by the researchers, the top of the framework consists of three factors that would most likely give the foreign students a difficult time to adjust.(don’t introduce your variables or study first.discuss only the theories. Develop the theories)
Torbiörn (1942) defined culture shock as the failure in interacting with the local environment. Until the foreign students gain the confidence to interact with the local students comfortably would they be considered being able to adjust to their new environment. The third variable of the framework therefore is the adjustment period of the foreign students their new environment.
(theories not well explained.theories on factors?)
Conceptual Framework
Considering the theories combined, the researchers came up with a conceptualized and more specified framework. Above the foreign students to whom the study is conducted for, are the factors which affect their adjustment period towards the new country. The factors were more specified into communication, culture and education. (not yet. Match and relate the theories first to your concepts/variable before pointing at the diagram)
As shown in this framework, a foreign student would try to learn the new ways of communication, the new culture, and the new ways of education as he/she resides to a new country. The foreign student would then experience the differences of the factors (i.e., communication, culture and education) in his/her home country and the host country. These factors then determine the adjustment period of the foreign students towards the new country.
The framework is organized in such a way that the factors which the foreign students go through as they reside to a new country would determine their adjustment period.
(conceptual is made shortcut)

Operational Framework
The operational framework now shows a more detailed and more specified background course of the research study. It now presents the target and focus of the study.
The target of this study is the group of foreign students studying in the University of the Philippines Cebu College which is found at the center of the framework. Above them are the obvious factors which will probably give them a hard time as they encounter the differences in their home country and the host country. And below the focus is the adjustment period of the foreign students towards their new school environment.

First among the factors is the language used in communication. Language is the primary factor in interacting and communicating towards the other students. Therefore it affects the social life of the foreign student. It is a big possibility that a foreign student speaks a different language in his/her home country. And another big possibility is that not all foreign students can speak or understand the English language fluently.

The second factor is the cultural differences in the students’ home country and the host country (i.e., the Philippines). The second factor is branched into two: the national norms and the social roles. The researchers would investigate as to how the foreign students cope up to the behaviors prescribed by the society (i.e., the national norms), and the behaviors that the society expects from them (i.e., the social roles).
The third factor is the teaching style of the foreign students’ new school. There is a possibility that the teaching style familiar to the foreign student is different from the teaching style of the University of the Philippines.
After the three factors, the foreign students will be investigated and analyzed. And since they are students, their adjustment towards their new school environment – the University of the Philippines Cebu College – is very crucial.
The course of the study which is represented by the operational framework is based on the concepts and ideas pointed out by the theories and resource studies provided in the previous pages.
(good. Your theoretical and conceptual should be like your operational.detailed and well explained)

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Review of Related Literature
This chapter discusses the parameters of this study (what do you mean by parameters?vague). In order to give more accurate results, the researchers explored further related studies as additional information and basis. The purpose of this study is to know the factors that would affect the adjustment period of UPCC foreign students. The literature about culture shock, its psychological effects on students who study abroad, adapting to the new environment, and learning the alien culture of the host country are discussed. This chapter ends with a summary of the literature review.
Hammer (1992) pointed out that the writings about international students generally cover four areas: “the problems of sojourners to encountering a new cultural environment, the influence of social interaction and communication on sojourner adaptation, and the culture learning process apparent in the cross-cultural sojourn.”
Problems of Sojourners to Encountering a New Cultural Environment
A person moving from one country to another country takes his own beliefs and culture with him and worse is that none of his culture would fit in the new country, as stated by Torbiörn (1942). The person’s “frame of reference” would still be insufficient in the new setting. Torbiörn (1942) assumed that the person’s actions, thoughts and his way of understanding the world would be very visible, but still, in his own culture’s perspective. The person may then think of this “frame of reference” of his to be correct, and therefore would not ask about the validity of it. So when the person arrives, he might still feel pleased with his “frame of reference” but he would be lacking on how he would apply it to the new setting.
Because what is important to the person is that he experiences satisfaction to his environment, he would likely choose norms that he is familiar with and ones that are less unknown to him over the host country’s norms that would seem alien to him. He would already be accustomed to this one-sidedly (is there such a word?) and this is where culture shock would arise. As defined by Torbiörn (1942), culture shock is the failure in interacting with the local environment. According to Hall (1995) as cited by Torbiörn (1942), the reasons of culture shock are the “loss of familiar stimuli” and their substitute that seems odd. He (who?)went past the merely social display and the other “spatial” portion between other things. He stated examples like the design of homes, offices and ship, and the pattern of spatial interaction as expressed in the distance between people in conversation, in queues, and so on. He also added time dimension that may also present uniqueness to the sojourner, like the mealtimes or the attitude to time-keeping may not be what the sojourner is used to.
Speaking of culture shock, Poedjiastutie (n.d) concluded from his study on foreign students studying in Indonesia, that the foreign students had experienced culture shock. He said that the culture shock the foreign students encountered belongs to two classifications: “in academic atmosphere and in social life.” He had the foreign students evaluate the Indonesian teachers’ roles and attitudes, and most of them rated the teachers below satisfactory. Aside from that, he found out that the organized programs and the local students’ attitudes shocked the foreign students. Regarding this matter, Poedjiastutie (n.d) recommended the department or institution to choose the teachers who are going to handle the foreign students. In relation to our study, UPCC foreign students are going to be interviewed for us to be able to comprehend if they had experienced culture shock in the Philippines just like the foreign students who studied in Indonesia.
Poedjiastutie (n.d) then figured out three points in each of the two classifications, student’s academic and social life, that causes them to experience culture shock. Poedjiastutie (n.d) wrapped up that in the academic life of a foreign student, the teacher’s role and attitude, the attitude of the local students and the inadequately structured program are the main sources of their culture shock while in their social life, it is the relationship between women and men and their different mindset and habits.
Influence of Social Interaction
With that said, a foreign student, who is unknowingly experiencing culture shock, may start to feel unsatisfied with his state and might try to reach out or adjust with the locals. Even though the foreign students would try to do the move, there would always be obstacles that they might encounter in the process. This is because every person is different whether he or she is ready to adjust flexibly, according to Ward, Bochner, Furnham (2005). They further added that the people who interact or are “socially skilled” tend to be conscious as to how the others respond to them and what others think about them. People, as what they had stated, obtain an adjustable behavior which enables them to respond appropriately towards various social environments.
On the other hand, Ward, et al., (2005) stated in comparison with the former that those who are socially insufficient may not have understood the society’s international la,(check) either because they don’t know the rules of social behaviour which creates interaction with other people, or, if they do know, are unable or unwilling to adjust.
In social situations that a foreign student might experience, Gordon (n.d.) believed that as problems start to gather, the student may seek for help. He said that the foreign student may conclude that the students of the host country are either unable to understand his troubles or are just apathetic to him. He thought that this is where it prompts the emotion, which is one of the clearest signs of culture shock: aggression to the new environment. He then added that the foreign student may start to think that the native students of the country do not care or know what he is going through and that they are numb, and may eventually create a poor judgment of them.
Now, in relation to school environment, Mcleod (2008) explained that the differences were most obvious in student-teacher relationship. For example, the foreign students generally preferred more error connection and believed that they have to be in agreement with the teacher. The foreign students believe that their teachers own the authority above all. On the other hand, the teachers are more likely to believe that students should have an internal intention of academic control. Nevertheless, it is clear that some of the most relevant problems that foreign students encounter occur in the school environment. The foreign students still need to learn the culture of the host country and the country’s academic activities in order to achieve academic success. “Student and teacher expectations, the patterns of classroom interaction, and even perceptions and definitions of intelligence,” differ in various cultures. Although the host country is trying to understand the challenges imposed by “intercultural education,” the burden to adjust to the new school environment is placed hugely on the foreign students.
So in connection with classroom participation, Ward, et al., (2005) implied that in general, students from individualist cultures are more likely to stand out in class, to ask questions, give answers and engage in debate. They are competitive in a sense. In contrast, students from collectivist cultures focus more in fitting in the crowd. They are not that participative in classes and are usually reluctant to draw attention to themselves. Collectivism is strongly related to power distance, and those students who are from high power distance cultures are also less likely to question and debate. These students are more prompted to show respect to the teachers and to maintain a formal and distant relationship with them.
Even though international students in general would like to have intercultural contact, their capability and eagerness to intermingle with the local peers are still mainly based on their cultural differences. Barker et al.,(1991) affirmed that generally, overseas students find it harder creating friendships than the local students. They are also likely to find their relationships less pleasing.
Ward, et al., (2005) implied that an individual’s performance may also be affected by fear about whether their behaviour is readily accepted by the society. They further explained that individuals in this situation, such as foreign students, business people, or diplomats, often tend to excel in the customs of their own society, while they find the customs of the new culture to be frustrating. “Competent adults in their home culture come to feel like helpless children in the other.” In relation to the study, a certain UPCC foreign student’s behavior may be categorized as either of the two: “socially skilled” or the “socially inadequate”.
Communication on Sojourner Adaptation
In addition to the usual problems of adjustment to university,cinternational students (check)also must face the difficulties associated with coming to a new country. In an early review (comma) Church (1982) identified loneliness, homesickness, depression, arrival confusion, the maintenance of self- esteem, somatic complaints, family problems or the loss of loved ones, time pressure, adjustment to food and climate, finances, and employment to be major problems facing international students. Uehara and Hicks (1989) singled out finances, lack of friendships, loneliness, culture shock, educational communication, lack of understanding, and language acquisition as the greatest concerns of international students.
“Communication is such an encompassing process that it filters through all human activities. No living person is unaffected by communication. Learning is, at heart, the expression of communication”. A quote from Howell and Howell (1979), as cited by Bickel (1985), says how communication mainly affects almost everyone. (faulty citation. Join the source to the quoted line.check apa.)For, it is the main root of all interaction. (choppy sentence)
(transition) According to Bickel (1985), language is the primary means of communication between the teacher and the student and therefore greatly influences the teacher’s choose of decisions. He stated that most of the time, a confrontation between a teacher and a foreign student is a consequence of the teacher’s wrong interpretation of the student’s vocal actions. He further said that there is a severe problem between teachers that deal with students who are not that fluent in English.
Grayson and Stowe (2005) found out that in many instances, it appears that relative lack of involvement of international students in formal and informal activities in the university is related to their lack of facility in English. They realized from their study that not having English language proficiency means that students have difficulty in understanding much of the content of their courses as well as learning the norms of their host country through interaction with their peers. They also found out in a study of students at the University of Windsor, Antonio (1991) that international students who spend considerable amounts of time with other international students reported more distress, anxiety and depression than other international students while it may be thought that maintaining contacts with fellow nationals may help offset some of the negative effects of limited interaction with individuals from the host country. They then hypothesized that students such as these are minimally exposed to situations that would assist them in learning norms of the host society. English ability was one of the most significant factors affecting the social and academic satisfaction of international students.
Culture Learning Process Apparent in the Cross-Cultural Sojourn
McLeod (2008) establishes that the connection between culture and language is complicatedly connected. He asserted that both are semiotic systems that depend on signs and symbols to convey and obtain messages, but when those traditional signs and symbols are altered or detached totally, especially for foreign students in a new environment, culture shock can surface. As quoted by McLeod (2008) (no year for secondary source) from Chapdelaine & Alexitch (2004), the “…multiple demands for adjustment that individuals experience at the cognitive, behavioral, emotional, social, and physiological levels, when they relocate to another culture” are indisputably significant for the adjustment of foreign students and often draw out preliminary devastating intrapersonal and interpersonal issues. However, Adler (1975) and Anderson (1994) (remove year) said, as cited by McLeod (2008), that these strains are neither inevitable for all foreign students nor are they essentially the only consequences of this likely positive transformation.
Wan (1999) (remove year) cited Pusch (1979) that in living together and influencing each other, people have developed culture, a sum of total ways of living, including values, beliefs, aesthetic standards, linguistic expression, patterns of thinking, behavioral norms, and styles of communication. On the other hand, it is the sum of total ways that assures people’s survival in a particular physical and human environment as still stated by Pusch (1979), cited by Wan (1999). Pusch (1979) affirmed theresult that people would take their culture for granted because they have been used to it, but he strongly believed that to know a culture, it would take time, so when people are introduced to a new culture with an unusual value and beliefs, the old way of interpretation of the world would be questioned and the new way is still forthcoming. He further added that this problem would make people feel bewildered and lost and consequently, culture shock takes place. (correct double year in citation)
Other times, (awkward) the effect of culture shock to the victim may not really be positive. Some victims would surrender his/her own individuality and would try to copy all the traditions and mindsets of the host culture. It could also be the other way around. The foreign student would try to resolve the problem by retreating secretly, decline to study the host country’s language, would not try to attempt in looking for friends among the native people, and would not show interest in any field of the local culture. (source?) While the victim’s mind thinks this way, he would show a diversity of unpleasant symptoms that he is fully oblivious of the degree of it. The victim would tend to exaggerate insignificant frustrations or hassle annoyance or madly pour it all out to the cause. Other symptom (the other symptom) is to excessively be apprehensive and would think that people are just going to fiddle and deceive because he or she is an outsider. As McCleod cited that as stated by anthropologist George M. Foster , (faulty; year?) "Culture shock is a mental illness, and is as true of much mental illness, the victim usually does not know that he is afflicted." (sources not acknowledged in this paragraph)
According to Young (2004) (check year again) as cited by Yu, cross-cultural adaptation is “the entirety of the phenomenon of individuals who, on relocation to an unfamiliar sociocultural environment, strive to establish and maintain a relatively stable, reciprocal, and functional relationship with the environment” (p.339). But for Hodge (2000) as cited still by Yu (same problem), the familiarity and the extent of settling in a foreign country can not assure better perceptive of another culture. Yu cited Young (2004) again that “a successful intercultural adaptation requires sensitivity to cultural differences, openness, and positive attitudes, other than excessive dependence on ethnic support systems”. That is why Wagner & Magistrale persist that the most efficient way of adjusting to a new culture is to experience trial and error.(faulty year citation.some authors do not have years)
According to Banks and Banks (1995), as cited by Ward, et al., (2005), the school environment is just a small reflection of the larger society. They said it mirrors the society’s values, traditions, and practices. Banks and Banks (1995) also stated that the foreign students are not only tasked to learn and adapt to the new culture, but they must also be able to apply these to their personal objectives and success. They explained that these foreign students must focus on their educational setting. And they further added, all of these cited by Ward, et al., (2005), that although intercultural education is already widely spread and training materials are developed in order to enhance the social relationship among the foreign and local students and teachers, the responsibility for adjusting successfully into a new environment falls on the foreign students themselves. (correct year citation)
(transition) Pyvis and Chapman (2004) believed that it is important for the student to create new friendships to provide comfort to him/her. Based on Oberg’s second characteristic of culture shock as described in terms of a sense of deprivation as a result of removal of friends, they understood from their study that most of their participants’ desire to make new friendships is because they are deprived from it (dull sentence). They proposed that faking a new character as a part of a group does not greatly lessen the difficulty in fitting in. They even believe that creating an identity with a group made it hard for the student to see themselves that they really belong to the group. As what Pyvis and Chapmen (2004) said, “Again, these difficulties can be read in terms of Oberg’s characteristics of culture shock, especially perhaps in terms of rejection fears, feelings of helplessness and anxiety and confusion in role definition.”
(transition) As cited by Ward, et al., (2005), Bochner, McLeod and Lin (1977) stated that studies of the “friendship patterns” of foreign students show that they tend to belong to three different social networks, each representing a particular psychological purpose. As what they had stated, the main network consists of bonds with the people of the same nationality. The purpose of this is to go over, convey, and confirm the values of their original culture. The second network contains the associations with host nationals. The purpose of this network is greatly helpful to the foreign students. It is to assist the foreign students with school matters and proficient aims. Usually, the people involved in this network will be other local students, teachers, counselors, university administrators, and government officials. The relationships of this network would tend to be professional and formal rather than personal. The third network consists of links and friendships with other foreign students, regardless of what nationality. The purpose of this network is to give the feeling of belongingness. They share the same sentiments as a foreign student, thus providing mutual support to each other. (connect sentences here for coherence.correct year citation)
Students studying in other countries encounter problems upon exposure to a new cultural environment. They experience culture shock because of the differences between the culture of their home country and the host country. Recalling what Torbiörn (1942) said, the culture of the host country has nothing in common with the country of origin. He emphasized that what is worse of them residing in other countries is that they still practice their own culture and find it hard to let go of it. From the related literature gathered above from different sources, the major problems of the foreign students deal with social relationships and interactions. One factor that hinders the foreign students to communicate well is language barrier. Language and culture, as stated above, are connected. In order to adjust to their new environment, it is inevitable for the foreign students to learn the host country’s culture. (so how will you relate your study here? Connect)